Remember, revising is the third stage of our writing process. In terms of the total time spent on a writing project, it should make up 50%-60% of the efforts.
As a part of our revision process for this paper, we participated in a peer review. We said that a peer review can be beneficial in many ways. Here is your chance to reflect on how our peer review can help or has helped you revise your draft.
Please respond to the following questions in your comment:
- How have you revised in the past? Did you spend 50% of your time on this process?
- Name and explain two strengths that the peer review revealed about your paper.
- Name and explain two things that the peer review exposed about your paper that needed improvement.
- Other than peer review, what revision technique(s) will you use for this paper or in the future
1)In the past, I tended to just write one paper, look it over once or twice and decide whether or not it sounded good to me. Then, I would just type it and whatever I wanted to add, I would just add it. I’m pretty positive though, that it definitely wasn’t 50% of my time.
ReplyDelete2)The peer reviews definitely showed me unity because all my paragraphs supported one topic and were in order to make the thesis sound good. Also, that my conclusion traced back to my intro and were connected to show the reader that relationship between the two.
3)The peer reviews revealed about my paper that I need to work on not writing a run-on sentence, which tends to be a habit of mine. Also, that I just need to add more details to points I’m trying to prove.
4)Other revision techniques that I would consider using would probably be the post-draft outline because you know that if you can’t figure out what the main topic of the paragraph is then obviously you need to go back and revise it.
1.) Many times, I would often revise. I would read over my paper over and over to myself, tweaking everything so that it sounded good...to me anyway.
ReplyDelete2.) The peer review didn't really help me, because the read said my essay already displayed all the ideas clearly. Therefore it was up to me to make revisions.
3.) As stated above, the peer who read my essay said there weren't any problems with it. Which kinda sucks because I don't know what to fix or if I need to fix anything at all.
4.) I will use the backwards reading technique to figure out better sentence structure.
btw Kristen Evans, number 4 is a run-on sentence >_<
In the past I would rarely revise aside from the updated vocabulary and sentence rearrangement. I would spend roughly 5% of my time revising my paper due to the fact I thought I had already written a decent and presentable paper.
ReplyDeleteMy peer stated that I had a very attention-grabbing introduction and my paper flowed smoothly. I have always felt that I have been strong in these two areas of writing.
My peer brought to my attention that I could use some more details to a few of my paragraphs and also expand my thoughts to provide more content in my conclusion.
In the future I will most likely utilize the backwards reading technique because it seems logical to work backwards to the start and realize what could be missing, and then fix or add what I need.
1. Although I have revised in the past I haven't spent 50 or 60% of my time doing so. At the most, I spent 10% of my time revising my papers. I used to write 1 draft and write it the best I could then only check for spelling and grammar mistakes in them. I never spent the time to look for unity, development or organization. So I would have to say that I haven't been spending the proper amount of time revising drafts.
ReplyDelete2. My peer stated that my paragraphs are logically organized so the thoughts flow smoothly. Also that my intro grabs the reader's attention and the conclusion ties up the paper ideas as well as leaves the reader thinking further.
3. My peer pointed out that some transitions could make the paper flow more smoothly. In addition to that, my peer revealed that I should provide more explanation on the quotes.
4. I would use the reading aloud method so I could edit out what doesn't sound right and/or add more things that need to be added. I would also consider using the post draft outline as well or whatever one that works best for me.
I have always revised as long as I can remember, I try to be a perfectionist so therefore I spend alot of time revising. Although I spend alot of time revising normally,no, it does not take me 50% of my time doing so. Actually I was not in class for the peer review at this time but I did have someone go over my paper for me and I would say it does work well because a fresh set of eyes seems to catch errors. Like, for example, it revealed that I had some examples in the wrong paragraphs as well as a few simple spelling issues. Other then peer review I would probably use the read aloud technique because I can hear my errors. Or I would even use the put away for another day strategy because i find it works almost as efficent as the peer review, kind of like a fresh set of eyes.
ReplyDelete1. Revising to me in the past was basically checking to make sure there were no grammar mistakes or things like that. After checking for those things I would just hand my paper in. I used probably about 5 to 10 percent of my time on revising.
ReplyDelete2. The peer review told me that my paragraphs were tied together well and that each paragraph focused on one idea.
3. Two things that the peer review exposed about my paper is that I need more details to support my ideas and some minor mistakes with sentences that didnt make since that I didnt notice.
4. I will try the reading backwards revision technique.
I have revised in the past. My 11th grade English teacher was obsessed with revising, especially peer revising. But 11th grade was the only time I really did it because most of the time I just tried to do my essay all in one shot. So my answer is no, I most defiantly don’t spend 50% of my time doing revisions. I wasn’t here on the day for peer revision but, I am defiantly going to do it because I learned in 11th grade that it helps a lot. In the future and probably on this paper as well, I’m going to use the reading aloud technique. It makes a lot of sense to me that reading out loud to yourself would make the best technique.
ReplyDelete1.) I have revised in the past but did not nearly spend anything close to 50%.
ReplyDelete2.) Two strengths about peer review is that they give you suggestions on what to possibly change, its in the eyes of a student and its another person looking at it so they see things that you may have missed that you can then correct.
3.) One thing that peer review exposed about my paper is that the introduction was not very grabbing, but it does establish the papers topic. Another thing that was suggested was that the body paragraphs need to be developed into more than one paragraph and seperated by idea and to go into depth.
4.) Besides peer review I could go to a teacher so they can revise it, parents, myself, and also use spell check.
1. In the past i typically did exactly what u said lots of high school students do, which is try to make your first draft your final draft.After I was done I would always read it and look it over and make minor changes where I saw fit, but never did I revise a draft using the techniques i've learned recently. When I did revise it didn't take much time at all not nearly 50% like I said I would only have to make a few minor changes and then I thought my draft was good.
ReplyDelete2. One strength was that my peer liked my intro. It wasn't too long containing sentences that were irrelevant or off subject or just made you wonder what the author is trying to discuss. It was a good solid short paragraph that is to the point and lets the reader know ex actly what to expect from the paper. Another was the post draft outline. My peer was able to easily pinpoint exactly what each paragraph was about and what each paragraph was trying to tell the reader.
3. My summary wasn't detailed enough into wrapping exactly what the paper was about. It needs to be more detailed. Another was my last body paragraph should of been my first paragraph. I thought the same thing but thats what peer review and revising will tell you about your paper. I made the switch and it really develops the paper better.
4. I'll always use the post draft outline because if you can't get a single sentence summary from your reader then they have no idea what you are trying to tell them. I also like the paramedic method.
1. In High School, usually how I would revise was having my mom look at it. Yes, I know, mom's know everything, but when she looked at it, she saw things that I didn't. I feel the same with what we did in class. When Tom looked at my paper, he found things that I would of never saw because it's a completely different perspective on the paper. The way you may see your paper, Is seen a completely different way to another person which is why I had my mom do it. She was honest and wasn't afraid to tell me something was wrong, and she saw things that I would never of been able to.
ReplyDelete2. Two strengths that peer review revealed about my paper was the amount of grammar that was wrong and how my topic sounded good to me, but not another reader. After Tom looked at my paper, he circled many grammar that I didn't notice which made me think to be much more careful. Also, some of the parts of my paper sounded like they made sense to me, but in reality, the reader (Tom) had no idea where I was going with them.
3. Two things that I needed improvement with after the peer review were my grammar and my "flow". "Flow" meaning how my paper flowed when someone was reading it.
4. Another revision technique that I will use for this paper will be reading it backwards. When Mr. Snow suggested that to us, I thought it was silly, but I tried it for another class and it worked. So hey, why not.
Yes, I have revised on almost every paper I have ever written. However, I don’t know how many I have ever revised spending 50% of my time on it, but I am sure it was often. In the past when I have revised it has usually been a peer review in class, and I correct some of the mistakes and just turn that in as my final draft.
ReplyDeleteTwo strengths that were revealed about my paper after being peer-revised were that I kept everything specific and made sure I answered the question and didn’t go off topic. Also, the second thing was how organized I kept my paper in order and using symbols I explained how my thesis worked throughout my paper tying everything back to it.
I didn’t really have much to improve on according to my peer reviewer I wrote a very good rough draft. However it was pointed out as suggestions that I could rearrange my symbols based on importance which I agreed with and did. Also he suggested that I don’t say the other story as much which I did in my intro and I agreed with that too and took it out.
Other than peer review I’m going to be read it to another person to make sure it sounds right and makes sense. I also think I’m going to be read the story to see if there’s anything to add to my paper.
1. In the past I have usually have not revised a paper. I would just skim it over for grammatical errors and turn it in. I would spend very little time on it, probably less than 50 percent. I was just glad it was over and I could move on to the next project
ReplyDelete2. When we did the peer review there wasn’t enough time for the other person to be able to tell me about the strengths of my paper. But they were able to tell me that my second paragraph need more evidence to support the statement that I was making and that I could probably make it into 2 paragraphs.
3. Another technique that I will use in the future for my papers is the post draft outline. I think that it will really help me to make sure that my paragraphs give enough evidence to tie into the topic sentence but also my thesis.
1.) In the past my rough-draft paper did take up 50% of the papers time, but that doesn't mean my paper was perfect. I never used a lot of the techniques we've learned in this class. I'd just write what ever came out of my head on loose leaf, then open word and have the computer spell check for grammer mistakes and print.
ReplyDelete2&3.) I wasn't in school for peer review from class mates, but my grandmother is an excellent editor when reviewing my papers, since i'v been in college.
4.) I will be using a few techniques for my future papers including post-draft outline, reading aloud, and reading backwards because its a different and interesting one. - Kayla Van Auken
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ReplyDelete1. I’m not sure if just re-reading and making small changes is counted at revising. If so than yes, if not than I never ever even thought about it.
ReplyDelete2. Two strengths would be: a) Getting thoughts from someone other than your teacher and around your age/level so your paper could be better understood by a wider audience. b) It makes you less embarrassed or stressed about having your teacher grade it.
3. I need to think things through before I write and to slow down when I “revise” because I miss a lot.
4. All of them! Anyone that will help with whatever paper I am writing at the time I will use. I am so glad that we are getting exposed to new methods of writing, something they failed to teach in high school.
Revising has never been something I considered to be an important part of the writing process. Therefore I have never spent much time on it, but after using revision as I did on this paper I have learned that it is crucial.
ReplyDeleteThe peer review showed that the paper had unity. My papers "flow" was very nice it just needed some adjustments. Also, my transitions were used carefully to give my paper this "flow".
In contrary, the peer review revealed that I needed clearer topic sentences. I did not incorporate topic sentences into all of my paragraphs. I also had add some information together as one, instead of having it broken up into smaller paragraphs
Peer review was a great technique for me, I used the peer review from class, and then had someone else take a look to see what needed improvement. I will most likely be using this technique first when possible.
1.The only way I revised my papers was for grammatical errors. I never really learned any other way. I did not spend 50% of my time on this process at all. I learned in class that the revision process is one of the most important parts of paper writing. If you don’t check you work you will lose points as well as clarity. I plan to definitely spend more time on the revision process in my future papers.
ReplyDelete2.The first strength pointed out in my paper as a whole had good solid content ,my ideas were well thought out. The second was I gave sufficient examples and specific details, therefore reinforcing my paper as a whole.
3.I definitely need to work on my transitions; my writing is kind of choppy. The second thing I need improvement on is having more than one thought is a paragraph.
4.I love the post draft outline technique, I understand it the best out of all the others. It helps to be able to look at your paper and give one sentence to explain each paragraph.
1. I have revised almost every paper Ive written in the past. I cant say I spent 50% of my time on it, but at times I do spend a good deal of time towards it.
ReplyDelete2. The peer review basically said that my ideas and details made sense and I just had to find a way to make them transition from one idea to the next.
3. Two things that it revealed about my paper was the lack of details and the need to better tie them in. The main opening paragraph was also a weak point that i had to better develop.
4. Post draft outline will probably be what i would use for this or other papers.